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The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut subjects such as arts and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on subject such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?

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In
this
 day and age, we are living in a world where education
become
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becomes
 a compulsory part of a child’s upbringing. It is commonly believed that children should only pay attention
on
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to
subject
 as
information
technology
 while some others like arts and music should be eliminated from the curriculum.
This
 essay will explain the reason behind my argument against
this
 thesis. Many believe that
information
technology
 and scientific
discorvery
the act of discovering something
discovery
discoveries
are now dominate
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have now dominated
 the social so students should only focus on them.
This
 is a very incomplete part of the picture as the enthusiasm of a child plays a considerable important part of one’s comprehension.
As a result
, if we only focus on
information
technology
, children who are weak
at
Suggestion
on
 that
subject
 might be
demotivated
 by learning in that way.
This
 would result into negative points in one’s future. It is believed that
such
 subjects like science and
information
technology
 do benefit a country’s
prosperous
Suggestion
prosperity
. Though it is a valid point, it is not always true in reality. Korea is a perfect examination in
this
 case. In a recent survey, BTS, a famous
boyband
 in Korea, contributed to Korea’s GDP as high as Korea Air.
This
 is a case for music and art are as important as
information
technology
 and school should help children in
faciliting
make easier
facilitating
 both of them, in lieu of
cuting
the activity of selecting the scenes to be shown and putting them together to create a film
cutting
curing
creating
 one. In consumption,
information
technology
has recently became
Suggestion
has recently become
 a trendy
subject
 that many choose to focus for the incentive financial purpose and some school or education
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 want to cut
subject
 like arts and music out of the curriculum.
However
, students’ interest plays a bigger role and imposing or limiting the choice of students is not always guarantee a man’s success

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