It is important that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays practice of egalitarian
school
is become
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has become
is becoming
becomes
a common place. Démocratisation of civilized world leads to
creation
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the creation
of mixed society, which affects
primary
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the primary education system
education
system
as well. Children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at
school
. It has wide-range positive and negative effect on their future. One positive result of
such
approach is diversity. Widening of cultural experience of the students is a core
values
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value
of
egalitarian
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the egalitarian school system
an egalitarian school system
school
system
.
School
is a model of basic social construction. At their Alma Mater children receive not only primal knowledges on main subjects, but
also
first
social skills. They learn how to live together and
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
social network
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a social network
with others, who probably has different physical and mental abilities, social privileges
also
.
For instance
, at some private
school
in
Ukraine number
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a Ukraine number
of places reserved
to
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for
talented students, whose parents can’t effort to pay for
education
. As they said, it stimulates all the participants to appreciate their opportunities and helps to develop
sense
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a sense
of healthy competition within. With
such
a divers
experience students
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experience, students
receive
necessary background
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the necessary background
for their future development. On the negative side of it is still the
system
disadvantages. Even with equal opportunities in
education
less privileged students still have limited access to
high
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higher
education
.
For instance
, in Ukraine
such
a social lift depends a lot of parents, who can’t support their kids while they studying.
As a
result some
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result, some
children can’t benefit from their
education
, so faced with inequality since the begging of their life. Egalitarian mixed
system
at
school
is double-edged sword. It has both positive and negative sides, and
such
ambiguity
is perfectly reflect
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is perfectly reflecting
is perfectly reflected
has perfectly reflected
perfectly reflects
is perfectly to reflect
contemporary society. With
global tendency
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the global tendency
a global tendency
to
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for
of
démocratisation people is still unequal.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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