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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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A group of people suggests that more funds should be allocated to protecting
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 whose existence are threatened.
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, others oppose
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 thinking it is a complete waste of resources. I'm my opinion, I agree that more money should be spent on protecting
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 from dying out.
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, allocating more funds to
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 program is never a waste of valuable resources,
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 a possible way of generating income through tourism. From there a plethora of
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 already out of existence, the reserved ones will eventually attract tourists across the globe as some people who have and passion for these
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 will do whatever it takes to have a glimpse of their existence. Through
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 tourism attraction, local people will be able to establish various businesses like restaurants, cafes, hotels and hostels which intend will increase revenue and boost the economy.
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, protecting these endangered
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 will aid in the conservation of the environment. What
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 means is that spending huge sum of money protecting these
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 will see various governing bodies put serious measures in place to ensure the safety of the environment which will result protection of lands, timber etc. An example of
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 is a forest in Ghana called ' Etiwaah woodland Reserves'.
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 wood reserve houses millions of different
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 whiles at the same time it is rich in natural resources like hold, timber and bauxite.
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 of that, millions of dollars are spent to protect the jungle and its
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 and the resources by deploying task forces and anti poaching task forces to fend off poachers and individuals who try to venture the reserve illegally. To conclude, it pays off to spend money to save endangered
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 because doing so has a myriad of benefits not only to these
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 but to the land both for now and the future.
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