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Why individual differences is a necessity in this era

#differences #necessity #era
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If individual
differences
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 did not exist, every human mannerism would have been built, designed and behaved in the same possible
way
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.
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 the study, every individual
is has
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with
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different perceptions, mindset, sex,
personality
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and personality
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 traits , with the passage of time, when an individual grows up with his / her traits, perceptions, and mindset,
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 by his / her culture,
society
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, and his / her social economic class.
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 how an individual’s personality is
being
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built and makes him/ her different from any other individual.
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instance
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, a person who lives in an urban area will have a different cultural lens and
way
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 of perceiving things than a person who lives in rural areas.
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, from the
phycoligical
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psychological
physiological
 point of view, there
are
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kind
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 of major
differences
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 among
the
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individual that classifies their physical, mental,
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and behavioral
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behavioral
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behavioural
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 perspectives. The following are •Intelligence ( I.
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 and E.
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) •Attitudes •
Differences
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 in achievement •
Differences
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 on account of sex Intelligence
differences
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helps
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help
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 to identify the I.
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 and E.
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 level of an individual and
helps
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help
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 another individual how to act with them.
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, if a teacher is well aware of his/her
students
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student's
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 and E.
Q
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level
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 the teacher will treat them
according to
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it
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them
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.
Instead
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 of treating them in
same
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the same
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 possible
way
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 attitudes of
individual
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the individual
an individual
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 towards
people
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, object and situation helps to identify,
weather
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whether
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 that individual has
positive
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a positive
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 or negative mindset.
Differences
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 in achievement can be visible in reading, writing and
in
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learning mathematics.
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instance
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, a
10 grade
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 student is better in mathematics in comparison
of
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 students in grade 11.
Differences
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 in achievement
is
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also
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 known as
differences
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 in abilities.
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,
according to
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 the research of McNemar and Terman, they have discovered on the basis of some studies that, Women have greater skill in memory
while
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 men have greater motor ability and men are superior in physics and chemistry,
while
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 Women are superior to men in languages. Now, from the organizational perspective
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individual
differences
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is
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are
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 a necessity because
,
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it
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they
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helps
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help
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 managers
to
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understand the behavior of an individual because it has
direct
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a direct
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 effect on productivity.
People
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 with different
culture
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 backgrounds work
in
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under
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the
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one roof and have different
perception
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perceptions
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 regarding everything and different
respond
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 to directives. It
also
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 helps in recognizing the productivity of an employee
weather
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whether
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 that person is in need of close supervision or not. Because
people
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 with different personalities interact with bosses, co-workers,
subordinates
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and subordinates
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.
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instance
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: an employee with
short
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a short
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tempered
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 will never take
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arguments or debate
easy
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 and it could be bad for his own personal image
whereas
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 the
cool minded
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 employee with calmly respond to arguments and will be good in
image
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his image
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. If we discuss
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about
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the societal perspective,
society
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plays
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play
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plays
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 a vital role in an individual’s personality,
behavior
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behaviour
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 and perception. Through
the
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apply
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society
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 an individual encounters
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of different perception and perspective of
the
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people
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 on one
things
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thing
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 that an individual identify the
differences
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 among each other. An individual difference is a necessity of
society
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 because it helps
understanding
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 and
recognizing
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 the abilities of an individual, what
differences
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 they have in their culture, what they need
according to
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 their desire,
what
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and what
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 rights they should get, rather than treating them in one similar
way
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To conclude
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this
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, I would like to say that individual
differences
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has
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 been important since the
big bang
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. In today’s
era
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era,
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 it’s being brought up and highlighted more because now
people
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 are getting educated and have the resources to break the barriers.
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Moreover
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 civilization progresses with the differently skilled individuals. Every individual contribution is based on their skill set.
Therefore
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, individual
differences
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is
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are
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 a necessity of today’s era.
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