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Parents, usually mothers, stay at home to look after their family. People believe they should receive a salary from the government for that. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people choose to be full-time housewives since they become parents in order to take care of their children. It is argued if they should be paid by
government
 due to their unemployment conditions. Personally, I disagree with
this
 argument. On the one hand, people should take their own responsibilities for decisions they made. As adults, people should fully consider the consequences before they decide the lifestyles they want. While some people choose to
work
 so that they can maintain their daily life, some parents, who select to take care of their families, should think about whether they can afford their living expense if they do not go to
work
.
For example
, many Japanese females will choose to be housewives after they get married and the husbands will be the main finance sources of the whole families.
On the other hand
,
government
 has supported families with pensions and subsides for daycare already since families delivered babies. Once a family has a newborn baby,
government
Suggestion
the government
 will pay parents' pensions for their maternity leave for around one year, which should be enough for family expenses.
Furthermore
, parents can send their children to the daycare after they return to their jobs, which fees were covered by
government
, so that they can devote themselves to
work
 without the distraction from children.
In contrast
, it would be unfair for those parents
work
 hardly if the housewives got extra pay from the authority because they did not go to
work
. To sum up, it seems to me that
government
 should not pay extra salary for the full-time housewives because the parents have gotten
government
 financial support and they should take their responsibilities for their own decisions.

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