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Some people think that natural talent is important to successful in sports. Other thinks hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Some people hold the opinion that
government
 need to tackle all environmental issues, while
rest
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the rest
 of the people says that it is the
responsibility
 of every individual who lives in
society
. I,
however
, agree
that is
 to be controlled through the
government
instead
 of put
responsibility
 on
society’s shoulder
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the society’s shoulder
.
This
 essay will define the both side views in between
government
 and
society
 that eventually would
evident
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evidently
 the
responsibility
 between two of them. Many adepts assert
that is
 people are more engaged in their friends, family and work as compare to past that shows busy life of their daily routine which creates obstacles to being a part of the
society
. Along with
this
, most of the people raise the question that people are paying taxes to the
government
 to spend money on those things which could be worthwhile for
society
 as well as country.
However
,
small number
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a small number
the small number
 of people
believes
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believe
 that the
government
 has no power to force people to work as
volunteer
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a volunteer
 except
their
people in general
they
 wish.
Furthermore
, it is the
responsibility
 of
government
 to provide
better environment
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a better environment
 to protect citizens from various diseases that could be more harmful for their lives, as well as
government
 should open several
institute
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institutes
 around the country to look an eye on environmental issues and enforce their employees to being anxious and active to resolve problems on
regular basis
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a regular basis
.
Further
adds
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adding
,
government
 need to implement sanctions on those machineries and equipments which is being a part of ruining
environment
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the environment
, alongside segregate the area of heavy machineries in case of urgency. To sum up,
government
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the government
 should be focused on environmental issues on a top priority.
Although
, it is
also
 a concern of the
society
 to consider and protect for the sake of the country.

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