A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others agree that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs including food and research. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons and relevant examples.

The debate over animals should not be exploited by people and they should have the same rights as humans is all over the world.People are divided into two groups, the
first
party support that animals shouldn't be used to satisfy human needs and
on the other hand
others believe that animals should
employed
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employ
to achieve their needs.In my opinion, animals are very important
source
of food and valuable
source
for
researchs
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
.
First
of all, can you believe that people can survive without eating meats?It's impossible for certain populations
to use
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use
plants as the only
source
of food.In
lebanon
an Asian republic at east end of Mediterranean
Lebanon
85 percent of the people enjoy eating
animals
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animal
animal's
meat
and most of their meals will include
meat
in it. Even though there is 15 percent of the population are
vegieterian but
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vegetarian, but
vegetarian but
we still cannot disregard that fact that there is still 85 percent who have
meat
as their main
source
for making meals.
Secondly
,
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,
animal
meat
is rich in proteins that our bodies rely on.
Therfore
Suggestion
Therefore
, meals that
doesn't contain
Suggestion
don't contain
certain
protiens
any of a large group of nitrogenous organic compounds that are essential constituents of living cells; consist of polymers of amino acids; essential in the diet of animals for growth and for repair of tissues; can be obtained from meat and eggs and milk and legumes
proteins
will cause certain health issues.Based on studies made in
UK
Suggestion
the UK
in 2002 red
meat
is very important to strength human's immune system.All in all, humans should include
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
types of
meat
in their meals to avoid any health issues.
Finally
, based on what we discussed
earlier we
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earlier, we
can conclude that animals are very important
source
for our meals and
researchs
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
.
Dispite
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Despite
all these facts we still see some people still support that animals shouldn't be used by humans and they should have the same rights.In my point of view, I support the parties
that believe using
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believe that using
animals to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their needs and getting
benifts
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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