Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that, the trend of technological innovation is rising exponentially. In that process, all the Multinational Companies are striving to introduce machines that can be in our day to day activities thereby decreasing human efforts while performing them. In my opinion, I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and they are discussed as follows. Starting with the disadvantages, it is obvious that introducing machines into household activities might make them lethargic.

This

is because, if most of the everyday necessities are taken by machines,

then

there cannot be much work left for people to do thereby decreasing their metabolism.

For example

, take the case of washing clothes, previously people used to spend hours cleaning their outfits and drying them but now it can be done with ease.

As a result

, people have been getting languid by sitting for hours in front of their televisions. These might lead to severe problems like obesity due to less metabolic activities.

On the other hand

, the advantages are more as there is ample amount of leisure term that people can make use of. As much of household work is taken care by the machines, they could use the term for their career or their interests.

For example

, due to the machines people can invest their term in more creative work like painting, singing etc., Which could eventually be much more useful and could be more useful to the society too. Humans could be bogged down doing the routine things daily, so it is better to use the machines. As human brains are designed to be innovative and not doing the same old things again and again. In conclusion, much of the household activity should be taken care by the machines, thereby creating an ample amount of moment for the humans to reach their career goals, or being more productive to the nation with their creations.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that punishment is the best way to teach children to behave well, while others disagree and point out that rewarding and praising them is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?