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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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For most of the people around the world
money
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 is the key to prosperity, and people think the more property or wealth you have the more happier you are. Whereas, others believe that the more
money
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 means more problems than it solves.
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, I believe that a person can live a happy life only if they have sufficient amount of funds to live a peaceful life, and can easily pay for the food and shelter.
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 with, there are several reasons which explains why more
money
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 cause only stress not joy.
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, if a person has millions of dollars there is no reason to go out to work and strive for anything.
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, rich people sort of attract the wrong kind of people, who only pretend to be their friends just because they have so much richness.
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, because of fake friends, rich kids get into bad companies and end up being drug addicts.
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, people start distrusting even those who are loyal and honest with you in any situation.
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, having plenty of
money
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 results in more fear. The rich will start to construct big walls around their houses to keep their wealth away from the world in the closed doors.
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 as, there is no point of having too much of property if you do not have quality of life, as well as, you do not have time to spend that
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 in a proper way.
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 but not least, they will become selfish and always feel that people who are poor are con artist and behind their prosperity. To sum up, because of all these reasons I personally feel that great amount of property bring stress and problems which is a total opposite of prosperity. It leads to loose them their sight of the real source of peace of mind which is friends and family not richness.
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