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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, many educational institutions teach courses online and encourage people to
study
 over
internet
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the internet
. In my opinion,
this
 is a positive aspect as it makes the education not only affordable to many students but
also
 good for the environment.
Firstly
, studying courses online is
lot cheaper
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a lot cheaper
 when compared to that of taking a regular course in a university. Apart paying the
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees, students need to spend money for accommodation, food and
travel
.
Moreover
, though few of the students depend on their parents for money, many of them have to do part-
time
 work to cover the expenses, which
inturn
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in turn
 affect their
study
time
 and eventually their grades.
For instance
, according to a
recenty
new
recent
study
, students who do part-
time
 job to pay for their studies tend to score less marks when compared to that of students who don't need to work. So, making education cheaper would attract lot many students who don't have much money to spend for their studies.
Secondly
, studying online brings in lots of benefits to the society and the environment. As students can learn their lessons
at
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in
 the comfort of their home, they don't need to spend their
time
 on
commute
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the commute
.
Therefore
, they gain more
time
 to
study
 and stay concentrated for more
time
.
Furthermore
, reduced
travel
 results in lower levels of carbon footprint by every student, which is good for the nature.
For example
,
travel
 by plane is the major contributor for the emission of carbon gases and reduced
travel
 would result in lower carbon emissions. To conclude, e-learning courses are the way of the future and they are here to stay for the benefits they offer. Teaching courses online establishes a level playing field for all the students irrespective of their cultural and
economical
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economic
 background, which is quite beneficial for the whole nation.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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