some people say that teachers should be paid according to how their students learn. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals hold the opinion that the teachers' income should be linked with their students learning attainment.
This
essay disagrees with
this
view because
firstly
, it will bring the huge stress on students and does harm to them and
secondly
, it could stop cooperation environment between educators in schools.
This
system would impose too much
presure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
on children's and teenagers' lives. In
this
atmosphere, every teacher will apply any strategy to raise learners' grades, including a lot of homework, occupying break time or PE class to tutor students, and even using physical punishment in sometimes. These methods will make all pupils suffering the huge stress throughout the
school
age.
For example
, in Korea, many schools link the teacher's salary with their students' learning achievement, which causes teachers using different ways to force pupils to study. Many teenagers have mental problems and even
suisides
the act of killing yourself
suicides
suicide
subsidies
because of the learning
presures
a particular course of action intended to achieve a result
procedures
.
In addition
, the system could prohibit development of cooperation atmosphere at
school
. Some
school
managers might argue that
such
policy can stimulate instructors' awareness of
competation
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
.
However
, from a macro-view, in
this
case, each tutor just would like to guide and help their own students, but who is unwilling to assist any other learner.
For instance
, in China, some teachers only would like to answer the questions from their own classes' students, while for the other students who want to ask a question, those teachers normally reject to answer. In fact,
this
is disadvantageous to the all learners' improvement
instead
. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the view of paying teachers according to their students' learn, because it will bring too much stress on students and it is harmful to
school's cooperation atmosphere
Suggestion
the school's cooperation atmosphere
and
inhibite
to put down by force or authority
inhibit
inhibited
inhibits
all students' common improvement. It will be interesting to see the consequences of
this
system applied of some countries in the future.
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