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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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Schooling is the primary precursor for children to gain knowledge. In the past, most of the schools were single-sex schools. But the trend is now very different in many countries as co-educational schools are gaining more popularity among the parents. Some people are choosing co-educational schools over single-sex schools and its mainly because students of co-educational develop more soft skills and have less
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 in later stages of their life. Schooling develops the primary base for soft skills like communication, making friends. Co-educational schools have a slight advantage in cultivating soft skills among the students. It is due to the fact that the students are exposed to both genders which helps them to develop their soft skills with both genders and makes them more capable to fit in every environment.
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, a study of Harvard business
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 which was conducted in 2012 reported that the students of co-educational schools easily become accustomed within the job environment than single-sex schools.
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 is something
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 built in every sector of our
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society, whether
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a job
 or business or household activities. Students having co-educational background
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 in their later stage as they have developed a sense of equality since their childhoods.
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, a group study having 25 students in each group was conducted between a co-educational
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 and a single-sex
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 of Paris shows a remarkable difference when they are tested to solve a problem. Co-educational
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 completed the work within 1 hour whereas single-sex
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 takes almost 3 hours to complete. It shows that different
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about
 a problem differently and when one combines these two the outcome to solve a problem is quicker.
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, despite of having disadvantages the single-sex
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 is still the choice for many parents. Many tend to believe that
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single - sex schools
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 develop a strong sense of competition within the students as well as helps to have less problems regarding early ages of children. In conclusion, con-educational schools are better in developing soft skills and less
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 within their students.
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 helps the students to develop a balanced way of leading life in late stage.

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