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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The above-mentioned line graph shows the
stock
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price
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 of four leading hi-tech companies between 2011 and 2016. It is clear from the graph that over the time from 2011 to 2016 total valuation of Facebook has raised
with
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at
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 a constant rate,
hence
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 making
graph
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the graph
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 upward
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on the other hand
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 share
prices
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 of yahoo
has
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 declined. The
stock
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price
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 of Apple has faced a lot of up and down
where as
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 the
stock
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prices
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 of Google
has
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have
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 remained constant over the period. The
stock
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price
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 of
the
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apply
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apple has moved very drastically, there has been a rapid increase in the
prices
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 from 2011 to 2012 and
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the stocked
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stocked
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 reached
at
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apply
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its peak
to
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of
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 30,000 but suddenly
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 year the
prices
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 fell to 5,500 (approximately) and after
that
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,that
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 there have not been
such
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 a huge change. The
stock
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prices
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 of Facebook and Yahoo have started from the same position ie. 5,500 (Approx) but both have different
tend
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 in their moment as Facebook has moved upward on the other yahoo has a diminishing movement in its
stock
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price
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 but google has remained constant for all 6 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, price, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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