Write a letter in response to the parent. In your letter, you should: • discuss and evaluate the issues raised by the parent in the letter • give your own views about teaching life skills and whether you think these lessons should replace other subjects in the curriculum.
Thank you for your thoughtful insert regarding your concerns about the preparedness of
students
to face the reality beyond school
. I truly appreciate your input for the curriculum of our school
about this
issue, and after conducting some meetings with the school
foundation, finally
I am able to give feedback regarding this
problem.
It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
I fully understand your worries about the practical life skills
that students
might lack once they leave the house, especially with your children
who still could not live without any supervision from adults after graduating from high school
.
However
, our curriculum has already been focusing on teaching the students
about their academic knowledge, and we must carefully balance these academic requirements with the limited time
available at school
. Moreover
, these practical skills
could be taught at home with the parents, where the students
could also
spend more quality time
practising doing the things for their lives with their parents. So, it is not ideal if the students
have to spend more time
at school
just to study these skills
at school
and spend less time
at home with their family.
Looking at the examples you have given about your children
’s daily life skills
after graduating from high school
, I believe that there are a lot of sources that your children
can learn how to operate the things inside the house, such
as YouTube, TikTok, and Google. Those sources could give your children
a detailed description of how to do their practical skills
, even more detailed than the things that we could teach them at school
. With these unlimited sources of knowledge, I am sure that your children
can survive in this
society without any trouble doing their basic necessities.
We will definitely review your suggestions once more and consider how we might improve our students
with the skills
they need from school
. Thank you for your valuable input regarding this
issue. Your continuous support for enhancing the quality of this
school
is greatly appreciated. We look forward to working together to enhance the educational experience for all our students
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task achievement
Address the issues raised by the parent more specifically to demonstrate a comprehensive understanding and response.
coherence cohesion
Consider adding a concluding paragraph that restates your main points and offers a clear resolution or next steps.
task achievement
Your writing tone is suitable and respectful for a formal letter, enhancing your task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
You have successfully separated distinct ideas into different paragraphs, which improves readability and coherence.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.