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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, social media
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 as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram, have taken over people’s lives. Some people believe that
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 is a negative trend impacting society. I strongly agree with
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 statement because social media is devastating social norms.
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, networking
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 changed all that,
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, according to a research, people sat in front of the computers and other gadgets, chatting for long hours, which resulted in sense of loneliness and depression.
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, because of the declining human-to-human connection, people have shallow relations.
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, social networking sites are creating a generation lacking close relationships
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 Another drawback is that young people are addicted to social
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media, which
 is leading to poor performance in
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. Children are more interested in posting pictures and updating their status on Facebook as opposed to concentrating on their
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 work,
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 students are not reaching their full potential in education. A study conducted by the University of Calgary concluded that students performed poorly in the
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 if they spent more than two hours on social
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,
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 improved immensely for students who stopped using these
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. Social networking
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 hinder children’s performance in
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school which
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school, which
 in
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the long term
 will impact society. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the use of social media has a detrimental impact on an individual and society. Users must understand the negative impact of these platforms and use them wisely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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