The only way to improve safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is certainly true that a large number
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of
people loss their life on
road
accidents.
Therefore
,
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,
it is a suggestion that imposing a severe punishment can reduce the mishaps on
road
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the road
.
However
,
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
compeletly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
disgree
be of different opinions
disagree
because
this
is far away from being best method others factors need to be considered.
to
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To
commence with
,
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,
there are some reasons to go against bad punishment for
road
safety.
Firstly
,
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,
such
rules are inequitable because sometimes
law
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the law
abiding people can
also
become the cause of
mishappening
.
In other words
, in some accidents only drivers are not
responsible but
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responsible, but
also
many others factors are
involved
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involved, such
such
as poor weather
condition
and
road
condition
. To elaborate, during heavy rain and storm accident rate goes high significantly as compared to clear weather
.
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.
Moreover
,
bad
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bad road conditions
road
condition
such
as narrow and broken roads makes it
more harder
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harder
more hard
for
driver
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drivers
the driver
a driver
to drive safely.
therefore
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Therefore
, Without considering
these fact
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these facts
this fact
how authorities can give
penalty
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a penalty
to driver solely.
Therefore
,
this
is not acceptable at all and cannot be implemented at any cost.
on
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On
the other hand, some people in favour of stringent laws because according to them long term jail and heavy fines will create fear in their minds and force them to drive carefully. While forcefully imposed laws have not always desired results. Rather than
thiking
the process of using your mind to consider something carefully
thinking
talking
about punishing people government should try to improve the
road
conditions. In conclusion
,
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,
punishing people for
road
safety is not a viable solution.
Government
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The government
should try to make better
condition
for driving to reduce the number of accidents.
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