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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manage should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that we held a company meeting at your hotel and we received lots of compliments on your services.
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 with, we decided to opt for your hotel for our annual meeting which was an important ceremony for us. We received positive feedback from our participants
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 as modern amenities, good decoration and high-speed wifi connection.
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, some attendants were disappointed with your spoiled
food
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. To be specific, the seafood served with cajun sauce or the Russian salad was not great. Luckily, no one got
food
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 poisoning from
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food
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.
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, I must write
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 letter to let you know about
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 improvements in
food
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 serving. You should check your
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 storage or the receiving goods procedure Despite your
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 good service, we do not mind your negative mistake. We still want to book your hotel service in the future. I hope you will consider
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Emily.
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Task Achievement
To enhance the task response, try to be more specific about the dissatisfaction regarding the food and offer more detailed suggestions for improvement.
Coherence and Cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, organizing your points into clear, distinct paragraphs has been done well. Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases for smoother transitions between ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Effective use of paragraphs to separate different points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Appropriate greeting and closing, contributing to a tone that is polite and formal, matching the letter format.
Task Achievement
Comprehensive coverage of all parts of the task, including what participants liked, concerns about the food, and suggestions for improvement.
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