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Fossil fuel is the main source of energy. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Fossil
fuels
 have been considered
as
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a major power source by many nations
till
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 date.
However
, some countries have shifted towards natural
sources
,
such
 as wind and sun. In my view, it is a positive development and will discuss why alternate
sources
 are a boon.
To begin
 with,
the
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fossil
fuels
 are non-renewable
sources
 of energy because they cannot be reused if used once.
Moreover
, they are being
over exploited
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 these days, which will lead to their complete exhaustion in
coming
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 time.
This
arises
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raises
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 the need
of
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 alternative power which could completely replace them in future.
In addition
to
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, the burning of
fuels
 produces exhausting fumes which enter into the atmosphere and deteriorate the air quality. To illustrate,
according to
 an official report of the US
energy administration
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Energy Administration
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, 76% of greenhouse gas emissions are solely
due to
burning
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 of fossil
fuels
 to produce electricity. Despite the higher costs of installation of alternate resources of power, they are
cost saving
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 and efficient over
the
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 longer duration of time. The major advantage of using them is that they are eco-friendly.
In other words
, they produce clean and green energy with no wastage.
Furthermore
, they are
the
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renewable resources which can be utilised again and again and can be replenished. Another important point to be considered is that
sources
 of non-conventional potential,
such
 as solar, tidal and hydroelectric are natural,
therefore
, they are available in all geographical locations. In conclusion, it can be rightly said that
the
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fossil
fuels
 should be replaced by alternative ways as they are non-renewable and
pollutes
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pollute
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 the environment. In my opinion, it is worthwhile to use renewable resources because they are both sustainable and
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy sources
  • wind, solar, and hydroelectric power
  • sustainable solution
  • finite resources
  • inexhaustible
  • economic growth
  • renewable energy infrastructure
  • health benefits
  • respiratory diseases
  • energy independence
  • energy security
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