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Some people say now there is less communication between the family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is crucial for everyone to communicate with their family members. But some people believe that these interactions have dramatically reduced as compared to communications done between family members two decades ago, and I completely agree with
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 opinion. As people these days have more work to do as compared to the past, they get less amount of
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 to spend with their families, and
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, a communication gap is created.
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, earlier people use to have six hours of daily work which use to give them ample amount of
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 to spend with their families;
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, the working hours, these days, have increased to ten hours, leaving less or no
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 and energy to dedicate to their families.
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, the digital gadgets have detrimentally affected the family's get-together
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.
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, in the early days, before the invention of gadgets
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 as computers and mobile phones, all the family members use to sit together and talked about various agendas and problems with each other during a holiday, which helped in developing a stronger bond.
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, now children as well as their parents spend their spare
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 chatting and socialising on applications
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 as Whatsapp, Facebook and Instagram. They get so much engrossed in those virtual people that they hamper their actual relationships by not discussing various issues, and in the end blame the generation gap for various quarrels between parents and children. In conclusion, I firmly agree that families interact less with each other now as compared to that past because the workload has dramatically increased leaving no spare family
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, computers and mobile phones have made us too busy that we are unable to spend some quality
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 with our families.

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