In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages?

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Young people

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to the metropolitan cities, leaving their hometown for various purposes,

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as education, career and business. Here, we can discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the people moving to major cities and reveal my own opinion.

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, students shift to another location, which have universities with excellent track record in their field of interest. It helps them to be graduated in their own interested subject and

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move

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to post graduation. To achieve

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, they compromise and

move

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out of their home town.

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Initially

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they were thought to be outside for a short period, but after the completion of the study, they were forced to stay in the same

city

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move

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to even the big

city

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to hunt a

job

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, they marry a girl and set up a family life and stayed in the metro

city

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, for work and other facilities. My friend, Raj was shifted to another country to complete his post graduation, he was thinking to return back after completion, but he got a

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and married. The advantage in the metropolitan cities is the facilities available in every field are enormous, when compared to the limited availability in the country side.

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, after leaving your

city

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, you could almost forget your friends and relatives and you will be like an alien. If a family man shifted to the another

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for work, but alone, due to his children's education or some other reason, It's a horrible experience.

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, a colleague of my friend moved to New Delhi from Tamilnadu, where he was working for

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15 years and he joined

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a half minded due to the instruction from management and

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, he left the

job

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due to family sick.

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could be one of the major disadvantages and a few other points

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need to be considered

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as family function, local festival, which you could miss for sure.

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, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in major areas,

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job

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, education and better lifestyle. In my personal opinion, I would stand in favour of

city

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life for better prospects, that cannot be provided by urban areas.

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In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages?

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In some countries, it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negative development?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave?

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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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