You applied for a new passport, and it got delayed. Due to this delay, you missed your (study) intake. You are very disappointed over this delay. Write a letter to the Regional Passport Office for the same. In your letter ● introduce yourself ● describe what happened and how you are at loss ● say what you want the officer to do
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Manzura and I live in Almalyk. I am writing
this
letter because I was dissatisfied with the delay caused by your officer in issuing my new passport
.
Briefly, I applied for my passport
on January 15, 2024, because my passport
expired on June 18. Then
I got a job and traveled
to Turkey 3-4 months later. But when I came back from the trip, my Change the spelling
travelled
passport
was still not ready. According to
the website of the passport
office, it was 1 month.Submitted by saydusmonovasomiddin94 on
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Task Achievement
Your letter provides a clear introduction to yourself and the issue at hand, which is good for task response. However, to enhance your task response score, ensure to further expand on how the delay specifically affected your situation, like missing your study intake, and emphasize the impact it had on you personally and on your plans.
Coherence & Cohesion
The structure of your letter is relatively clear, but could be improved by more effectively organizing your ideas into paragraphs. A paragraph dedicated to the consequences of the delay, followed by another clearly stating what you wish the officer to do would improve coherence.
Coherence & Cohesion
Including a formal closing to your letter, such as 'Yours faithfully' followed by your name, would enhance its cohesiveness and adherence to the conventions of formal letter writing.
Task Achievement
The tone of your letter is suitably formal, which is appropriate for writing to an official entity like the Regional Passport Office.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've initiated a clear introduction of yourself and succinctly stated the purpose of your writing, which establishes a logical start to your letter.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,