In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

The older people are the
valuable
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most valuable
asset
for
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to
our
society
and they should be treated well in the old home. But it is the debatable issue who will pay for
the the
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the
expenses to take care of them. Some people think that respective family should bear the cost of looking after
them but
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them, but
in my opinion the
Government
should pay for the related expenses. The people who
has retired
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have retired
from their services are generally called retired or old people. During their working
ages they
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ages, they
contributed a lot
for
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to
the
society
and for the country. They have paid a substantial amount tax to the
government
treasury out of their income.
This
taxes used for the development of the country and the
society
.
Moreover
, in the fiscal budget, there are separate allocation for the well being of the aged persons which includes free treatment, free residence and recreation facilities for them. So considering the contribution of
the old
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older
people during their active ages to the economy of a country, it is the responsibility of the
government
to
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
them with
fre
able to act at will; not hampered; not under compulsion or restraint
free
fire
fur
old home facilities where they can live happily with other old people.
On the other hand
, some believe that individual family should bear the cost of the old people who lived in
the oldhomes
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older homes
the old homes
. The main reason behind
this
,
government
should use their
fund
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funds
in productive sector where expenditure for
old
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older
people
has
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have
no returns. Another reason behind their logic is that,
the old
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the older
people are under the insurance coverage so the insurance company should pay for their expenditures related with
old
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older
home and others. Beside that there are so many charitable organizations who has
specific fund
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a specific fund
for
this
purpose. So the
government
should not pay for taking care of the old people. In conclusion, I must say all the payment related to the taking care of
the old
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older
people should be provided by the
government
as it is the only way to respect their contribution to the
society
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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