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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people more and more speak each other with help stickers or images because it it faster than write
as
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
 messages. So
this
 way more colourful and emotional.
Although
 it destroyed relationships between older and younger generation and create gaps bigger. As we have seen society has advantages and
problem
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problem, then
then
 using
communication
 with photos. In the one hand videos and pictures become more popular for many reasons.
Firstly
, it is easier than write
text message
Suggestion
a text message
, a person only puts button one or twice
time
. It economy a
lot
 of
time whatever
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time, whatever
 the
time
 is a value in the modern world.
Secondly
,
then
 people receive photos, they can show the base issues in other side.
For example
, my husband very often takes photos of trees, flowers, our children and send them to me and I have felt him better than he writes
text
 because I can see the world through his eyes. In my opinion film and photographs make
communication
 more lively, emotionally and simply. In the other hand, most people prefer speak each other using
text
 messages, especially older people. Often they considered that
such
 way of speaking improves them because if I write every day many times I do it better and more accurate.
Also
 society is worried about using pictures in
communication
 because it follows to enjoy social networks more that real life. For instant, according channel TED younger people, who likes Instagram, speaking throw photos a
lot
 of them afraid of speaking face to face. So there a
lot
 of disadvantages of it. In conclusion, I can say that I agree that
communication
 with photos and films is more exciting and colourful way than written message. People using
text
 rarely than pictures because it has a
lot
 of
time
 and more difficult.
Although
 I think that both methods need. If someone needs to send instructions or answer the question he will use
text
 message. In the case
then
 person wants to share emotion he sends photos.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visual communication
  • Emotional impact
  • Transcend language barriers
  • Universality
  • Infographic
  • Memory retention
  • Misinterpretation
  • Manipulation
  • Complementary
  • Evocative
  • Multimedia
  • Contextual understanding
  • Ambiguity
  • Visual literacy
  • Instant communication
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