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The pie chart below shows the worldwide distribution of private insurance policies.

The pie chart below shows the worldwide distribution of private insurance policies.
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The pie chart compares the four kinds of private
insurance
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 policies in the world,
while
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 the table illustrates the policy owned by
country
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the country
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, namely, India, England, and Australia.
Overall
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,
insurance
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 for
auto
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autos
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 has a large proportion globally as compared to others as the least,
while
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 more people in England are insured than in Australia and India. Focusing on the pie chart, it is apparent that auto, health, life, and other(s) are the four types of private
insurance
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 in the world. Auto
insurance
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 has the largest share, which accounts for 35% of the total,
while
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 health and life have 31% and 28%, respectively. Other
insurance
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 policies have the lowest percentage of only 6%. The table shows that 25% of the people in England have a private
insurance
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 policy, 10% more than
of
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in
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 Australia, and three times more than that
of
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in
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 India which is 7%. The majority of Englishmen and Australians have registered for car
insurance
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 which accounted for 10% and 1.9%, respectively,
while
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 3.5% of
Indian
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Indians
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 considers the importance of health.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words insurance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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