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We have imagined the possibility that life exists on other planets. Do you believe that there is life in the universe outside of Earth? What would the implications of proving that alien life exists? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

In our modern generation, astronomers and astrophysicists are determining the presence of alien
life
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 in the
universe
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. I would argue that
Earth
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 is not the only habitable
planet
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 in our
universe
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. In
this
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about
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the reasons to support the existence of
alien
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aliens
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 and the
side-effects
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 of an alien
life
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 discovery. I strongly believe that
Earth
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 is not only
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life-hosting
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a life-hosting
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planet
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 in our
universe
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. First of
all
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all,
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 the
universe
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 contains billions of galaxies
and
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 each of them is made up of trillions of planets.
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 the chance
on
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 developing
a
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life
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 on a
planet
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 is
hard
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low
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, there’s still a high possibility of
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alien
life
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 because of
a
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 huge number of planets.
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, astrophysicists found that a distant star has a water-vapour component.
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, many researchers believe that
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oxygen
gas
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can be obtained from
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 extraction of
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ice on a
planet
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. The
side-effect
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 of an alien
life
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 discovery are essential. One of the main edicts is the connection between us.
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,
human
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humans
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 on
Earth
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 could learn
the
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 development of an alien’s
civilization
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 and adapt those ideas to use on
Earth
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.
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 exploration would be easier because of an additional source of fuel from an
alien’s
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alien
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planet
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.
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,
a
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 discovery of
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alien
life
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 could lead to an invasion of resources
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 eventually results in a space war. In my opinion,
Earth
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 is one of the planets in the
universe
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 that
contain
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life
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While
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also
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 be risky for our
civilization
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civilisation
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 on
Earth
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.

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structure
Add a clear plan at the start and a short finish at the end to show your view strong.
content
Explain each idea more with one simple example.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like first, next, also, but to make the flow smooth.
grammar
Fix small grammar and use steady, easy words.
content
The writer takes a clear view and speaks on the topic.
content
There are some good ideas like learning from an alien and fuel for travel.
structure
The text is split into three parts, so the plan is seen.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vastness
  • statistical probability
  • habitable planets
  • Drake Equation
  • extremophiles
  • hydrothermal vents
  • monumental
  • resilience
  • adaptability
  • philosophical
  • human-centric viewpoints
  • interstellar
  • cosmos
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