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The use of social media, such as Facebook, Instagram is replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, with the explosive growth of technology, social networking sites
such
 as Facebook and Instagram are beginning to take over person to person interaction. Personally, I totally follow the idea that
this
 trend will provide humans with more pros than cons. On the one hand, keeping in touch with others through social networks is convenient. To illustrate, because the Internet is becoming more common now, people can easily access it anywhere and anytime with a smartphone.
Therefore
, social media apps are able to help them interact with their friends easier by texting, calling or even seeing each other’s faces on the screen.
As a result
, these types of apps make communication more comfortable and time-saving.
Moreover
,
this
 is an effective solution for long-distance communication.
For example
,
instead
 of the traditional way like writing letters and sending telegrams in the past, using social media can help everyone receive and send messages immediately, so they can save time and exchange more information with their relatives, especially parents who want to talk with their children living or working abroad.
However
,
this
 is not always the best way to replace face to face contact due to the importance of human interaction.
For instance
, in some settings
such
 as business, real-life conversations are essential for businessmen to discuss directly with counterparts to reach the final decision on their contract. Another situation is that when individuals really miss their loved ones, texting or talking through a screen seems not to be lively enough as it would be better with physical contact including hugging and kissing one another. To sum up, social media platforms will definitely bring back numerous benefits, but in some cases, it cannot replace entirely the conventional communication method.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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