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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #health #future
In the present days, people tend to take their health more seriously than they used to, owing to the fact that there are now epidemics in the world. Some people predict that people's level of fitness
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 bound to degenerate in the nearest future. I beg to differ on
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 not a fixed
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 in change. These days, people exercise much more than they used to in the olden days, both physically and mentally, so that would strengthen their physical and intellectual capabilities Personal hygiene is practiced on a daily
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 is one of the many ways people use to curb the epidemic in the world at the moment. A few years, there was an outbreak of a deadly epidemic in Africa that affected as well. It was important to stay away from sick people at that time, as that was always a potential threat to people who were healthy enough. The government is admonished to build infrastructure to increase the possibility of better health in the country

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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