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Environment pollution is too alarming to be managed by individuals. Real change can be made at the government level. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Although
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such
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 topics will never yield a consensual agreement. A dialogue on the
environment
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 pollution will lead to thought-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of numerous arguments that exist on either side, environmental pollution can effectively be controlled by the
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. Through the course of
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, I shall explain my point of view by considering both sides of the argument.
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, the
government
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 has launched so many schemes for the public to create awareness about the cleanliness of the
environment
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 like Swatch Bharat Abhiyan that focus on the cleaning the surrounding, homes, offices and public places. Because of
this
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 large scale scheme everyone is putting their hands in the cleanliness drive.
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, the
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 is helping to manage environmental pollution.
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, we can see
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in
 public places there are dustbins placed to put the garbage so to keep the place clean for long, but people are not using them properly and throw away the garbage on the floor. To stop all
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government
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 can launch a penalty drive to the people who are not following the guidelines to keep the
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 pollution-free.
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, by the aforementioned reasons, individuals can help the
government
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 to keep the
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 clean. I see there is potential evidence to support the arguments that I have provided
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 my opinion is that
government
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 is the real player to keep the
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 pollution-free. I am inclined to believe that individuals should cooperate with the
government
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 to keep it clean.

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