The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute infromation on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute infromation on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts
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The illustration depicts the way of gathering weather information that
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the Australian
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office of meteorology adopts to
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predicts. It is apparent from the data that there are several stages behind preparing and transmitting weather
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. In
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steps
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informations
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is
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received by special appliances and they can spread through communicational tools.
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the first stage, a satellite provides
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informations
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in
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photo
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that could be analyzed and
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used for
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forecasting
.
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Also
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radars can bring data and show them
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the radar
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screen.
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show some documents
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chart which is
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source for
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the forcast
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forcast
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forecast
process. All kind of these tools gather
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information
for experts and helps them to tell weather conditions beforehand. After collecting the data which are provided already ,they can be processed. Some specialists must work on them before
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them transfer via mediums. These works could do with aid of computers and
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the knowledge
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of related experts.
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stage analyzed
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can
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different
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of media. People can have access to them by watching television,reading
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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, listening to the radio and using recorded
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announcements
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words informations with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 5 times.
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