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Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

#people #animals #test #safety #medicines #necessity
Medical science has enormous development as compared to the previous generation and it is necessary to involve in more
research
, because human being's are getting a new kind of virus attack over a period of time. It is impossible and prohibited by law to test a medicine on the people, as a trial and error method. To avoid
such
 circumstances, an animal has been found which got the same bone structure as a human being. Rat is one of the best example, it's got a similar design as human. One of the recent study says, more than a million rats killed for the medical testing purpose. The debate starts here, some people raise their voice against
such
 cruel and unwarranted incidents. It is a fact, unfortunately we are in a position to accept
this
 scenario. To protect and ensure human safety, it is mandatory to be proactive and discover medicines which can cure and have no side effects. It can be done, only by using the drug on animals. One more example, animals are not only used in
research field
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the research field
research fields
, but
also
 in our home products,
such
 as shampoo and soap. Rabbit's were used and shampoo dropped into their eyes, to confirm no side effects. To come to the final point, It could be painful to use animal in the
research
 field, but we do not have any reliable option. At the same time, it should be monitored by the concern government department. In my opinion,
unfortunately
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unfortunate
 animals are used in
research
, but to protect human beings, it is the available option to test, before use it on people.
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