Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Music
, the collective wealth of all human beings, is an amazing access to gath
ering peo
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gather
ple all around the world together without barr
ier of
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the barrier
barriers
the language. I totally believe that it can make us bond with each other all over the world. As far as I am concerned, for one thing,
music
can produce emotional resonance among people. When we listened to the romantic
music
, it could conjure us up romantic relationship with others and elicit our sweet feeling, so we are likely to be immersed in it no matter our age, colo
r or
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
culture.
Besides
, if we listened to happy
music
, everyone's brain would secrete a specific chemical substance which can lighten our mood and make us relaxed and comfortable.
Moreover
, when gloomy melody played around us, we would be surrounded by the sad atmosphere, so that we could not help shedding our tears. Generally, our brain is programmed in the same way, so our similar feeling can bring people together in
this
world. For another,
music
is a good instrument for building friendship with other people. Hobby is one of the reasons why people link with each other.
For example
, when we met a stranger
also
interested in
music
,
then
we would have more
deeper conversation wit
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a more deeper conversation
more deeper conversations
h him. So in the process of sharing our favo
rite son
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
gs and singers, our friendship will be built unawares. In conclusion, no matter who you are and where you come from,
music
, which can yield spiritual bond with others and make us build close relationship, can gather people on earth together.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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