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Many High Street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

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The proliferation of online shopping has
lead
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led
 to a downfall of most of the high
street
 shops. In my opinion
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this
 development outflows both positive as well as a negative effect.
To begin
 with
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 online shopping has shown a remarkable growth trend in terms of satisfaction
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ease and
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
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 People find it easy to buy a variety of commodities online without stepping out of their homes.
For instance
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 in a country like India
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 clothings can easily be available
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for
to
 applications like Shein
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 Myntra
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 Ajio etc.
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And
 that too with discounted prices and mouth-watering offers which are not provided by the high
street
 shops.
Hence
, people would rather prefer online shopping than the
street
 shops.
On the contrary
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,
 high
street
 shops are facing a tremendous loss because of their shops being replaced with online shops.
Thus
, there is a great reduction seen in their community.
Finally
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 I agree to the fact that the preference to online shopping has affected the development in both positive and negative ways.
Also
 the offers provided by the online shops are more availed by people than those by
street
 shops. In conclusion
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there may be a time when online shops will totally replace high
street
 shops.
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