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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the most important responsibilities of parents is probably the best care of their children. It is believed that all mothers and fathers should attend parenting courses so that they are better prepared for parenting. In my opinion, it is the right way, but it is not really required. On the one hand, parents will have mighty benefits of parenting classes.
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, mothers and fathers are provided with specific knowledge on how to raise a child at different stages of development through
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 courses. Parents who engage with parenting courses will gain insight into their children's needs.
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, their children will enjoy a good care from their parents.
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, basic medical training to help them handle cases about their kid's health is really needed.
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 aid training teaches parents what to do if their kids have a high fever or have trouble breathing.
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, engaging in training is beneficial, it's not really required.
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 is because many parents, especially those with financial difficulties, have to work overtime, in the evening or even on weekends, just to make ends meet. Participation will result in financial burdens due to payment of tuition.
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, parenting is said to be an innate skill that every parent can naturally when they have children.
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, when a natural child is born, the mother's instinct to take care of her kid will be self-sufficient without training. So parents have the right to decide whether or not to participate in
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 skill classes. In short,
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 there are some benefits that parenting classes bring, they should be optional
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 of mandatory.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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