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Developments in technology are causing environmental problems. Some think the solution is for people to adjust to a simpler life while others believe that technology itself can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some immense environmental problems
such
 as global warming and ozone depletion in Earth’s stratosphere can be ascribed to technological developments. While some people believe that living a simple life can mitigate these problems, I contend that the best measure is green technology. I firmly believe that environmentally-friendly technology is the best answer to the problems.
First
, electric or hybrid transport vehicles can reduce the amount of traffic fumes that has been damaged both the biosphere and the atmosphere of Earth.
For example
, thick layers of smog in Beijing had gradually diminished after most petrol and diesel cars were replaced by electric ones.
Second
, the use of alternative energy sources
such
 as solar and wind can stop the over-exploitation of fossil fuels,
thus
 reducing the amount of greenhouse gas emission, the main culprit of global warming.
Finally
, with the latest technological advancements, household facilities that once threatened the environment have become greener. An excellent example of
this
 is that modern refrigerators and air-conditioners do not produce CFC, a type of gas
that is
 proven to be the major catalyst of ozone destruction. There is a common fallacy that a simple lifestyle can adequately address environmental issues. People may argue that by cutting household and transport energy use, they are making a substantial contribution to environmental protection.
However
,
this
 method does not stop the massive energy consumption at industrial sites. Some may
also
 claim that not using electricity at home is the right choice, and events
such
 as Earth Hour is an appropriate measure to cut carbon dioxide production. Ironically, the mentioned event is more symbolic rather than practical, as most people start to light candles for lighting purpose, an act that produces even more carbon-dioxide than light bulbs do. All of the existing data provide a concrete foundation that advances in technology should be adopted to tackle environmental problems, while simple ways of life are an ineffective and sometimes counterproductive solution for these problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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