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Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The pie chart reveals the levels of satisfaction among part-time and full-time students towards their university library in terms of IT
support
 and current opening hours. Overall, whereas the large proportion of students of full-time students gave positive feedback to IT
support
, it was considered unhelpful by most of part-time students.
Additionally
,
opinion
Suggestion
opinions
 about current opening hours was less divided as the great majority were satisfied with it. One particular interesting fact highlighted by the
figure
 is that with regards to IT
support
, very positive feedbacks were given by the largest proportion of full time students (55%) with a much smaller
figure
 of 20% of their part-time counterparts.
However
, almost the same percentage of full-time and part-time students were quite pleased with with
this
 service, at 32% and 35% respectively. While 45% of part-time students rated IT
support
 as unsatisfactory,
this
figure
 was over tripple (13%) for full-time students. Most students were very happy with the opening hours, 87% and 72% for full-time students and part-time students. The proportion of full-time students considering
oppening
first or beginning
opening
 hours to be quite good (12%) was more than half (23%) the
figure
 for their counterparts. Only a small minority of students were not all satisfied – just 5% or less.

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