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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
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Some people insist that money should be spent to construct in new building
instead
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 of maintaining obsolete ones because they want a current design in architecture.
However
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, I am not satisfied with
this
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 view. Upcoming reason will be sufficient to support my view. Repair and preservation of sculpture were too expensive,
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 it provides the identification of human civilization. If they not preserved the history,
then
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 it would be lost. For
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next generation
Suggestion
the next generation
, there is no idea about the past, so without knowing the old ages would create a misleading about their country. Some architecture which is described as a world wonder, they are constructed by ancient people. In
this
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 modern era, it is very difficult to built like those ones but they created without any help from technologies. For one clear instance,
thanjai
Suggestion
periya
a city in central Illinois on the Illinois River
Peoria
kovil
Suggestion
Kovil
cove
 is one of the best architectures in the world because they did not use any binding product.
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, maintaining an old building would give an economic growth because many tourists like to learn a culture
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, it can useful for schools and universities to learn the culture by visiting to that place. Many people do not devote their time to visit those types of building because they did not care about the past events To conclude, maintaining cost of building would be greater
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 it gives many information about their life and it creates an awareness for people
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