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Some people believe that in order to reduce crimes, prisoners should be given longer prison sentences while some people think there are other alternative ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no
gain saying
take exception to
gainsaying
 that
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
crime
increse
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
increases
increased
 in
many countries because in
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many countries because
 some countries no rule and regulations which the bad effect on our society.
however
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However
,
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,
decrese
decrease in size, extent, or range
decrease
decreased
decreases
crime
,
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,
prisoners should
given
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give
 longer
prisonand
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prison and
othrr
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
others
 say we can reduce with other ideas.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would discuss about my
viwes
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
views
 and
opnions
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinions
.
firstly
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Firstly
,
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,
it is
notice
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noticeable
 to be that
,
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,
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 important role in every country which they
have reduce
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have reduced
 the
crime
 with own choice.
beside
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Besides
Beside
, they take provide laws and rules in our country and
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should be banned some television programmes who show the
unsensor
not subject to censorship
uncensored
 videos as well as advertisements.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
it can
increse
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
 the public security in specially hotels
,
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,
 schools
,
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,
collegesetc
.
Thus
,
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,
 the one reason they banned the vulgarity websites on internet.
for
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For
 example
,
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,
 in many
countries people
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countries, people
 using nude
videos websites
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videos, websites
 and posted on social media which bad effect in society.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, there are more reasons for
reduces
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reducing
reduced
crime
 who people have long time in prison
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should provide jobs in
jail which
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jail, which
 they criminal improve life and
earn money send
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earn money to send
 to family.
what
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What
 a more
,
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,
in school and collages give moral lessons to
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 and young
people which
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people, which
 the more
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 effect on their mind and motivation skills.
Similarly
,
goverment
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the government
government
 should open public parks and gyms which youngsters can improve health and more aware for drugs
to
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To
 sum up, it is clearly that
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should provide jobs and education in
jail which
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jail, which
 the good for prisoners and they improve our life other big
benfit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
benefits
for
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of
 our society.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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