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IN SOME COUNTRIES AN INCREASING NUMBER OF PEOPLE ARE SUFERING FROM HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT OF EATING TOO MUCH FAST FOOD. IT IS THEREFORE NECCESARY FOR GOVERNMENTS TO IMPOSE A HIGHER TAX ON THIS KIND OF FOOD

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AN INCREASING PROPORTION OF POPULATION IS DEVELOPING
HEALTH
 CONSQUESCNCES BY OVEREATING UNHEALTHY FOODS. I PERSONALLY BELIEVE
THIS
 MATTER OF PROBLEM COULD BE TACKLED BY IMPOSING HIGHER TAXES ON THESE KIND OF FOODS. Adolescents often spend their quality time by hanging out with their classmates in fast food restaurants because those places are inexpensive for them. Age between 6-18,
this
 period is very significant to the body development,
that is
 why the parents’ responsibility to give
advice their children
Suggestion
advice to their children
. Unless they do not provide any hard lesson for them, the government should impose higher taxes on fast foods to divert those from dining out. In developed countries the majority of
nation
Suggestion
nations
 often develop
health
 problems due to unhealthy foods.
For
example in
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example, in
 the UK and the USA, there are more overweight people than healthy ones on the streets. Fast foods contain harmful chemicals which in later stages of the developments can lead to
health
 problems
such
 as diabetes, high pressure which can intertwine our daily lives of loved ones.
Moreover
, underlining
health
 issues can put added strain on
health
 services.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 is better to reduce taxes on healthy foods and levy taxes on junk food at the same time. To conclude with, education on living
healthy life
Suggestion
a healthy life
 is not only the parent’s responsibility, but
also
 the
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
government's
’. By imposing higher taxes on high-calorie foods can prevent the nation become unhealthy due to the fact that more people would avoid those places to dine out.
Moreover if
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Moreover, if
health
-related problems are prevented, the demand for use of medicines will decline which its production is highly costly to the governments. So that amount of money can be used for developing infrastructure.

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