The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the advantages?

The advancement in recent decades makes our lives much easier than we were in the past.
Similarly
, the online
community
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community, such
such
as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram and so on, have been using globally and the number of visited these applications each day has been growing significantly.
Thus
, the effect of the interpersonal relationship is being concerned. Despite the fact that
this
situation will be worsen, the benefits of
this
networking are to be considered. It is believed that
internet
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the internet
has become a part of human life, as well as playing a vital role in almost every inch in
this
world. Today, more than half of
population
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the population
are familiar with
this
advent. Without any doubt, it is used regularly by every generation, from children to adults. Having
stay
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stayed
connected with my friends who live abroad, Facebook keeps us getting closer and up-to-date. If Mark Zuckerberg had not found
this
useful tool, we would probably have to go back to the traditional way;
that is
mailing letters, which could take a whole week to receive. On the other side, the drawback has been still discussed whether it will take the place face-to-face interaction and isolates people from their society resulting in the absence of conversation. Obviously, time seems to be spent more on internet surfing, photos or contents sharing
instead
of interact with each other.
In other words
, virtual community distracts their attention; people have so much reliance on their mobile phones that they ignore the surroundings even their relatives or friends leading to segregate society. Eventually, it is inevitable that online socialising is increasing rapidly. Rather than
only focusing only on
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only focusing on
this
kind of device all the time, we should use it wisely. All in all, even though there are some negative effects from using social media, the positive ones far outweigh them.

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