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People follow interests and have hobbies. Do you think it is good to have hobbies? How can people learn from hobbies?

#people #interests #hobbies
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Gone are the days when people used to
work
 in irrelevant positions. Human being
,
Accept space
,
nowadays
,
Accept space
,
has enormous courage to fulfil their particular desire.
This
 essay will explain how excellent it is to have hobbies and how one can benefit from it. In
this
 developing smart world, everyone has a right to choose their career willingly. In my opinion, one becomes more successful if they recognise their area of development. As it is true that, people can learn more from their own experience rather than someone else's.
In addition
, passion for something would lead to the accomplishment of it. A good illustration for
this
 could be the actress Priyanka Chopara. She has developed her interests to
work
 in Hollywood serials.
However
, hard
work
 and strong mind had made her a tremendously popular among the world. Having a hobby and converting it to the dream job has become trendy since past few decades. It is scientifically proven that, people can concentrate more and perform excellent if they
work
 in the field which attracts them most.
Moreover
, positive outcomes will be the advantage of doing that. So, in
this
 way, people develop various skills
such
 as, communication if they are interested in business, management and concentration skills if they want to become a manager or supervisor. I pen down by saying that, to perform well in any stage of life, one should emerge interest in appropriate field in order to accomplish desired goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrich
  • personal fulfillment
  • fosters
  • self-expression
  • personal growth
  • valuable
  • patience
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • growth mindset
  • social network
  • community
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • cognitive decline
  • achievements
  • career opportunities
  • self-esteem
  • confidence
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