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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for child’s development while other think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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Certain demographics of society feel that educate students at home have a better development for children, while others believe that a teaching in the academy is essential for who are studying in primary and secondary.
However
, both methods have advantages and disvantages, but in my opinion, nobody is better than another, because it is
effectively
Suggestion
effective
 will depend in which circumstances is happening one family. The positive aspect of teaching at home is that you can avoid bullying and sickness contagious.
Also
,
this
 is a good option for boys and girls that their parents have to travel many times.
Nevertheless
, the reality that these students live, is not the real world, and sometimes when they are adults have adaptation’s problems.
For example
, I saw a case about an adolescent that studied in her residence, but when she grew up, she could not have friends, due to her social side was not
development
Suggestion
developed
developing
. The advantage of going to educational institution is that in
this
 place there are professionals specialized in certain subjects that are tricky to study by yourself
such
 as math, science and language.
On the other hand
, it is commonly stressed to find a good institution where kids can learn the best way. I worked in the Ministry of Education, and I saw that in some college there was discrimination, so everyone
do not have
Suggestion
does not have
 the same opportunities, which was very unfair. In conclusion, both cases have positives and negative aspects, but the election about which education is better will depend on several factors,
such
 as behaviour and ambitious of the kid. Indeed, the only thing that should be relevant is that the
schoolar
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
 can study in the place that he or she feel more comfortable.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized learning
  • cater
  • flexible schedule
  • extracurricular activities
  • safe learning environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • socialization
  • diversity awareness
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • punctuality
  • resources and facilities
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • specialized subjects
  • experts
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