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Some people think that certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought that some particular criminals should undertake
community
 service
instead
 of imprisonment. In my point of view, I believe that doing
community
 work is the most appropriate punishment for offenders in certain cases.
To begin
 with, non-paying job should be entitled to
people especially
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people, especially
 minors who commit an insignificant crime.
Such
 jobs act as a more effective deterrent than
prison
since
Suggestion
for
 the criminals just need a short interval of time to improve their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and the lengthy
prison
 sentence is not suitable.
For example
, when the offenders are convicted to steal modest objects like a watch, a bag, small quantity of money and so on, the jury can tackle the case by giving them hours doing
community
 services.
Besides
, the individuals who just steal few things often have acceptable manner and their guilty action is usually temporary.
Therefore
, works which benefit the society should be handled by them. Apparently, unpaid work is the best option to solve the minor case so that the society is enhanced and the criminals are justifiably punished at the same time.
Secondly
, another advantage of prisoners doing
community
 service is that it prevents over-crowed offenders in
local
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local prisons
the local prison
a local prison
prison
. Since the crime is increasing dramatically in the present time, more and more guilty people are put in
prison
. In that case, a court of law will chose to sentence the criminals by giving them non-paying jobs
instead
 of incarceration.
Moreover
,
this
 measure taken by the jury can
also
 reduce lack of supervision in
prison
 as well as avoid locating minor criminals in and harsh and detrimental
prison
 environment. Due to
such
 advantages, it is undeniable that the
community
 work policy for the minor prisoners works very effectively. In summary,
community
 services are considered as the more proper way to punish slightly guilty prisoners rather than imprison them in some particular cases.
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