In many countries around the world, teenagers are involved in crime. Some people say it is because the parents spend long hours at work, thereby having limited time for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are of the opinion that adolescents have taken to criminal activities because of their parent's hectic work schedule leading to parents having reduced time for their children. I moderately agree with

this

point of view.

This

essay will discuss the reasons for my point of view. Admittedly, long working hours of guardians may have a negative impact on children because most parents might be too busy for their kids. Sometimes, these parents work between 9am to 5pm, and get home after 9pm. Often, some parents even work on weekends, which is a time that should be set apart for the family. Because of these circumstances, no meaningful interaction exists between them, these parents are oblivious of their ward's activities and are unable to effectively monitor their activities leading

However

, a parent's long absence from home, due to long working hours is not the only factor to be considered in a teen's involvement in crime.

This

is because the other factor, peer influence

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is to be considered, as a child would not be stuck at home throughout the day without any form of interaction with the outside world. These kids go to school

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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192 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Parental supervision
Peer pressure
Criminal activities
Economic instability
Financial stress
Role models
Social determinants
Neighborhood quality
School environment
Social services
Quality time
Ethical values
Community involvement
Social support systems
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