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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant

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Human’s significance is decided on the bases of the social rank and the condition they live in, and the material possession they own. And
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 has been a criterion to judge people in the
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 we live in. In the past, people were respected on the bases of their intelligence, kindness, trust and their contribution to
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. In my opinion, old-fashioned values are essential for a human to grow and develop in his life.
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, the importance of possession and materialistic wants are very common these days because they represent the social status of an individual. One focuses on it because they want to have the importance and fame
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 they live in.
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, actors and actresses focus on the way they look, the attire they portray, the lavish
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 they experience as they have many people following them. In my opinion, they get
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habituated to such
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 a comfortable
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 because of which they tend to forget the values or morals of their lives and they tend to lose focus on moral things. Is being honest and loyal important? Yes, having moral values and following them is very important. Most of us need a prosperous family which follows good rule and values. We still give significances to friendship and different relationships, that’s when we create a good bond of trust and a sense of belongingness.
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, every parent wants their children to learn good values and have a healthy and sophisticated
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. To conclude, I believe it is important to have a balance between old-fashioned values and the new era’s
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. As both of them have equal importance in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Materialism
  • Social status
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honor
  • Kindness
  • Integrity
  • Consumerism
  • Superficiality
  • Ephemeral
  • Philanthropy
  • Prosperity
  • Altruism
  • Narcissism
  • Humility
  • Empathy
  • Ethics
  • Moral compass
  • Minimalist
  • Contentment
  • Material possessions
  • Status symbol
  • Wealth disparity
  • Moral bankruptcy
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