Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
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have different
opinion
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regarding learning
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While
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some
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feel that studying
history
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is not relevant, I believe that it is beneficial for
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to understand the present scenarios. In
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I will discuss both these views. On the one hand, one main reason why some
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feel
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of historical events
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not significant is past situations are changing rapidly so that it cannot help humans in their development.
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, learning about
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the stone
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stone age
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Stone Age
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period cannot help a person to face the present circumstances as there are many advanced
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had
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evolved.
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,
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consider present and future periods
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more crucial than past years, so knowing about present situations and thinking about upcoming years are more beneficial than learning
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events.For
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,a survey conducted by the New York
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found that 80% of American teens are interested in studying present
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rather than the rudimentary inventions that
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during
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century.
On the other hand
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, learning
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is beneficial for
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in numerous ways.
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,
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can gain a plethora of experiences from the previous generation's lives because of
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they can mitigate the
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risks
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and mistakes in their own lives. As an example, if there was a natural disaster
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as
earthquake
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an earthquake
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or
floods
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happened in the
last
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decade,
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could take precautions during the next natural disaster occurrence to reduce the detrimental effects.
Secondly
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,
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of ancient
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communities'
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life helps
people
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to understand the culture and traditions of their country and it
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helps
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them to learn about their roots
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people
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can gain ample experience and
knowledge
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.
For instance
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, by studying ancient practices only
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found relevant
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about alternative medical Fields like Ayurveda, Yunani, and acupuncture.
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, learning about rudimentary
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that
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used in previous centuries to help scientists
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find
cutting edge
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technological innovation for
betterment
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the betterment
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of
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's lives in
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the present
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and future.
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is because ameliorating past
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always
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people
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to find out new and advanced versions of the same technique. A study,
for example
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, conducted by
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queen's
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university
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found that around 58% of new innovations,
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happend
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happened
in
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century
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of improving
the
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past
technologies
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. In conclusion,
although
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many
people
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think that studying
history
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as
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is
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a waste of time, I feel it is useful for
people
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in many ways ,
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as gaining experience, knowing about the culture and traditions and improving the past
technologies
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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