Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, war
among
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between
the countries is the major problem that
need
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needs
to rectify utmost priority to restrict
further destruction
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the further destruction
of life and properties of the common people. There are
lot
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a lot
lots
of events are organized to tackle
such
issues,
However
, many people believe that the match played between the nation have
major impact
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a major impact
on neutralizing tensions and improve relationships. I agree with the view point and my position is outlined in
this
essay. Primarily, sports
had became
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have become
became
the most prosperous
businnes
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
basins
in the world,
moreover
, the international match which
are
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is
in huge demand will generate
massive amount
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massive amounts
a massive amount
of money for the playing nations where people love to watch their county man to play against the other national team.
Such
economic benefits force the political leaders to
fogot
dismiss from the mind; stop remembering
forget
the differences and concentrate on
further
growth.
For example
, the countries like India and Pakistan are fighting with each other
since
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for
ages but
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ages, but
the cricket
series which
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series, which
was played between them
recently had created
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had recently created
huge income
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a huge income
huge incomes
which
realise
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realises
both the nation about the advantages of peace which later made them to sign
peace treaty
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a peace treaty
peace treaties
and
also
agreed on various other business mostly on import and export of goods
In addition
, if the sports match played in different countries, the people get the opportunity to travel to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
nation where they can inter-exchange the culture and tradition.
Such
cultural exchange will help them to understand each other and create respect among
them which
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them, which
eventually the main
reasone
a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
reasons
for developing peace with other countries.
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