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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Is this is a positive development or negative development?

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As it is seen nowadays, people prefer to live alone
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 of living with their families. In my view, the merits of
this
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 phenomena are less as compared to the demerits. On the one hand, living far away from family has few benefits. It may be good for a person who is doing a job. As it is seen that for an employee who is leaving at a significant distance from his/her home due to his/her job. So, for that reason, it may become hard for parents to live in a new area because they are more connected to their old place where they are living.
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, it was found that due to escalation in prices of everything around us, it was difficult for a need for an individual to handle a whole family. So, from that perspective, living alone is a good decision.
On the other hand
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, those who are living together have more benefits. The foremost thing is that it is good for children for from all sides because as we know that these days, I did not have proper time for their kids, but if they are living in a big family
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 they may get good guidance in their studies from other members of the house.
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, children's never feel lonely in their own house, as we can play with other kids in their house rather than going outside. At least, if an individual person, needs financial help
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, in that context, they may easily borrow from their family members because no one will stand behind us accept our family ones. In conclusion,
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 living alone had some advantages, I believe its drawbacks are more significant.

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