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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying a product ( such as cell phone) or service (e.g medical treatment) Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that in case of purchasing a product the main thing people should consider is the
price
, which I don not agree at all. I completely disagree with the statement as individuals should pay attention to the character
first
.
Initially
, I believe the condition and service of the commodity should be considered if someone wish to buy that, as people need to use that for a particular time.
Although
 money plays an important role to buy something, but not only the person will use that
also
 he would want to keep the product for a long time. Only the best characteristics can do so.
For instance
,
last
 month my sister bought a phone for her when she only paid attention to the
price
. After coming home, she found the phone is not working well.
Therefore
, quality is much more important than money and high
price
. Another reason is self satisfaction which is more essential than anything.
In other words
, there is a good connection between buying and satisfaction as a person always wants to buy according to their will. But for the high
price
 they just back off. So they go to a cheaper place to buy a low cost thing to save money but do not feel great inside.
For example
, I was in Sylhet for one whole week and I travelled a lot, where I saw some rare stones which were so expensive, I could not buy those stones because I had less cash.
Thus
, it is very crucial to be satisfied in a long term perspective. To conclude, I strongly believe that purchasing a product with best quality and self satisfaction is much essential for individuals because it makes people happier and delighted.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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