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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

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 a common believe that one of the most important problems with the increasing world population is that of producing foods for a large number of people. As a solution, some human beings have some thoughts that GM foods (genetically modified foods) are valid for these issues. Actually, I disagree with
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 opinion due to special reasons.
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 of all, I believe that genetically modified foods are unhealthy for people. GM foods – which is
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 called as genetically engineered foods – that their structures of DNA are changed by scientists. As GM foods are not beneficial for humans, they cause people have different diseases.
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, their effects may create big problems while the person is not aware of those. One reason behind is
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 GM foods take part by not allowing people to live longer and healthier.
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 of
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, it causes the decreasing of human race gradually,
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 it is said that expanding world population is a trouble on account of feeding them.
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, some people think that it is an advantage of GM foods being available in any season. It may facilitate their works,
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 as a cooking berry cake of berry lover in winter,
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, it is a fact that eating vegetable or fruit in their own season is much more better than the other one.
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, genetically modified foods may give bad reactions in person,
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, they cause rash on the human body. In conclusion, to my mind the thought of feeding the population with GM foods is not useful at all. People can think
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 the best way, but
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 exactly the end of the human race itself.

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