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More and more people nowadays are learning on the Internet of going to class. What are the advantages of learning online? Do you think online learning can totally replace the classroom learning?

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Nowadays, technology
have developed
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has developed
 so the scientists want to replace all the classroom learning to online course. A lots students in the
highschool
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high school
 or
university
 interested to
learning
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learn
 online than go to
school
. In
this
 essay show about advantages of
leaning
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
 online by two reasons and show about my impression.
First
 of all, students can save their
money
 on transportation because they stay at home and study on the internet. If they go to
school
, they will spend a lot of
money
 on the transportation and food.
For example
, the students spend
money
 on food because they need to get up early to go to
school
 or
university
 so they don't have enough time to have breakfast. In the addition, adult spend too much
money
 and time on the transportation. It will better if the institute has
online course
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an online course
 for students. The
last
 not the end,
online course
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online courses
 can protect the students form some viruses. Nowadays, the world face is Corona viruses, the institute, the
university
were closed
Suggestion
was closed
, the students can't go to
school
 for studying. By
this
 problem, some
university
 have e-learning classes for their students because it is safe if the students stay home and study by e-learning. In conclusion, learning online
have
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has
 a
lots
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lot
 advantages
such
 as save a lot of
money
 and protected the students from the illness. In my opinion, students need to go to
school
 and learn their education from
school
 or
university
 because they can ask the lecture wham they do not understand the lesson. I think online classroom cannot replace all station classroom. It can replace only a part when the country has some problems like illnesses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • autonomy
  • global perspective
  • affordability
  • technological proficiency
  • self-motivation
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